Astrea: Six-Sided Oracles

Astrea: Six-Sided Oracles

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Ben 7 月 13 日 上午 8:32
Text errors
Very cool game! I just wanted to report some grammar and style errors I encountered in the text:

1. Faulty parallelism[en.wikipedia.org] in boss node descriptions. For example: "Yields 150 Star Shards, a Sentinel, an Epic Die, a Black Hole Blessing and recover all your Hearts." The first four items in the list are nouns, but the final item is a verb phrase. Possible fix: change "recover all your hearts" to "full heart recovery."

2. Missing period in post-battle rewards menu: When picking a reward after a battle, all of the tooltip descriptions end with a comma except "Recover all your Hearts" for the Recover Hearts item.

3. Missing apostrophe in Enhance tooltip: "Enhance 1 die from any target until end of enemies turn." This should be enemies' turn, with a trailing apostrophe, or perhaps rephrased to something like "enemy turn."

4. Number agreement error in chest tooltip: In the tooltip for chest nodes, "Choose up to 2 Safe Die" should be "Choose up to 2 Safe Dice," plural. (Ditto for other chest types.)

5. Split sentence in tutorial text: There's a single sentence of dialogue in the tutorial that's broken up into two dialogue boxes and capitalized and punctuated as two sentences. It should be a single sentence. I neglected to screenshot the first half, but here's the second part: "Once an enemy's overcorruption meter gets fully filled."

Bonus: I noticed a few comma splices in the tutorial text, but I didn't bother screenshotting them since those have become so common in contemporary writing. But they will annoy grammar pedants!
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[AG] riv otter  [开发者] 7 月 14 日 下午 1:06 
Thanks for the heads up. I'll send this up to the team to investigate!
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